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Secret Admirer by ~lifeeternal13:iconlifeeternal13:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Human Nature > Open




You gave me that look
Weeks ago
And I dreamt of it last night

Last week
I wrapped myself in your smell
And they shook their heads at me

You gave me that hug
An hour ago
And my heart still leaps from it

I wonder what is underneath
Your unsure demeanor
But it doesn't matter

(I'm your secret admirer ...)

Wide eyes
Naivety
I'll protect you from it

(... If you'll let me ...)

I'll kiss away your fear
As long as you'll have me

The sound of your voice
I have to swallow my heart
So I won't blurt out
What you don't want to hear

But then again
You don't care
I'm just another
Aquaintence to you

And I'll sit in cry in my bedroom
Forever
Your secret admirer
©2004-2009 ~lifeeternal13
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When you're too blind.

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~Bluebreeze Nov 28, 2004, 1:58:15 PM
*cries with you* That's so very sad
but so very pretty. :+fav:
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~Disillusioned-One Nov 28, 2004, 3:02:54 PM
that is so very awesome. i love it. i really do

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"All God does is watch us, and kill us when we get boring. We must never, ever be boring." Chuck Palahniuk
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~ismwaek Nov 28, 2004, 7:03:13 PM
I really like this, it's very well written, overall it flows very nicely. The only problem I had was a little thing, in the first stansa you put the time in the second line, in the second you move it to the first line, and then back to the second line, maybe put it in the second one for the middle stansa, just to make it a little more uniform, but what do I know. ^^ very nice job!

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"There's rosemary, that's for remembrance; pray, love, remember: and there is pansies. that's for thoughts." Hamlet- Shakespere
"Because everyone knows that while Glam rock may fade away again, Love is forever."-HP-ff-Angel Reid
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~lifeeternal13 Nov 29, 2004, 5:07:25 PM
*smiles* Thank you. :hug:

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With a wail, you let them know you're furious, you're back.

~RomanHoliday666
~shadowkeeper1327
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~lifeeternal13 Nov 29, 2004, 5:08:37 PM
Thank you.

--
With a wail, you let them know you're furious, you're back.

~RomanHoliday666
~shadowkeeper1327
~SweetCantarella
~DigiZombie-Thing
~Pyroinsomniac3
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~lifeeternal13 Nov 29, 2004, 5:09:48 PM
Thank you for the tip, but I'm actually glad you noticed that and that it threw you off. Haha. That was the point. I hate when things are uniform.

--
With a wail, you let them know you're furious, you're back.

~RomanHoliday666
~shadowkeeper1327
~SweetCantarella
~DigiZombie-Thing
~Pyroinsomniac3
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~Disillusioned-One Nov 29, 2004, 6:23:25 PM
welcome

--
"All God does is watch us, and kill us when we get boring. We must never, ever be boring." Chuck Palahniuk
Click Me! [link]
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~ismwaek Dec 2, 2004, 5:13:20 PM
aah, I see, well then, good job! it does accually help to make sure you have the attention of the reader...and you can just ignore me then...I'm just a silly oc person...^^;; ::dances off::

--
"There's rosemary, that's for remembrance; pray, love, remember: and there is pansies. that's for thoughts." Hamlet- Shakespere
"Because everyone knows that while Glam rock may fade away again, Love is forever."-HP-ff-Angel Reid
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~shadowkeeper1327 Dec 4, 2004, 6:47:36 PM
doesn't know what he's missing *shakes head*
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